♫ Orsay ♫
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Post by ♫ Orsay ♫ on Jul 5, 2010 20:49:29 GMT -5
Member Name: Fabia Margo Lafrist Request:If possible I would like an item added to Fabias possessions Trader necklace - A small silver necklace where at the end is a symbol of intertwining arrows going in opposite directions. Inbetween the arrows is a black pearl. This is a magical necklace that allows the user to store three clothing sets inside the necklaces symbol itself, as if pushed aside into its own seperate dimension. When worn and magic is put into it, the users clothes switches with the necklace's clothing inventory. You can also remove or put in other armors or clothes that arent armor. Using the users magic the necklace can repair damaged clothing over a course of one day. Character Profile Link: ymaggion.proboards.com/index.cgi?board=acceptedchar&action=display&thread=198
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Post by Risk on Jul 6, 2010 15:32:23 GMT -5
Well, I'll be honest, I'm only adding this if you fix the grammar in the paragraph. I will not add this as is. Fix the description and I'll process it.
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Post by ♫ Orsay ♫ on Jul 6, 2010 20:59:16 GMT -5
Sorry about that. The grammer is believed to have been fixed.
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Post by Risk on Jul 6, 2010 22:12:18 GMT -5
There are still two errors. The first and most obvious is in the first sentence.
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Post by ♫ Orsay ♫ on Jul 6, 2010 22:18:13 GMT -5
fixed.
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Post by Risk on Jul 6, 2010 23:09:41 GMT -5
-sigh- I'll fix it for you.
Processed.
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